User blog comment:Piggyxl/IceClan/@comment-31448721-20190207031440

Criticism time

I really like the idea of a clan that like in the snow, and although their hierarchy is similar to those of the IceWings from another book series, it's not all word-to-word copying; you decided to change it up slightly for a creative purpose.

On another note... it would be great to expand the hierarchy section, because the leaders do not have 'star' as a suffix, perhaps you could explain why? Also, I suggest minimising the abilities a bit; i understand that climbing and camouflage are great examples, but swiftness? I'm not sure, considering the fact they have layers and layers of fur against the cold and they have to wander around in snow... hearing is alright, I guess?

there ya go