Talk:Diamondflight's Journey/@comment-37768332-20190106021557

Oof sorry I'm a grammar critic:

It needs to stay in one person and tense: it can't switch from first person to third and from past tense to present. And also, where are the quotations? I don't know if you are allowed to replace them with --.

Oof sorry I'm a big, big grammar critic

Is it okay if I fix the grammar?

AAAAAAH SUCH A GRAMMAR CRITIC!!!!!!