Talk:Phoenixfire's Rise/@comment-37529955-20190720170728/@comment-39549339-20190814061442

Expanding on Crystal's idea, here's a rough idea on how I would write it:

"Calm down, Wren," Phoenix mewed, exasperated at his little sister's constant anxiety.

''"How can you be calm, out of all things? Look at those Twolegs! There's obviously something wrong!" Wren cried, pointing her tail to two Twolegs, furiously absorbed in their discussion. An ominous creaking sound followed Wren's words, and Wren squeaked.''

''Phoenix rolled his eyes. "It's probably nothing," he said casually, shrugging off the sound. But Wren's eyes widened until their whites showed.''

''"No..." Wren whispered, terrified. "Look, Phoenix, look!"''

''Phoenix whipped around and his ears flattened as he saw a Twoleg walk towards them, swaying unsteadily on its two paws. In its other two paws, it carried something that looked very heavy and forbidding. It was some kind of tree trunk, except it was made out of the same material that made up monsters. Suddenly, a resounding CRASH! echoed through the room as the Twoleg dropped the trunk. The noise temporarily defeaned Phoenix and Wren shrieked, tearing off as fast as she can. Phoenix chased after her, yowling for her to come back. However, in the heat of the chase, Phoenix didn't notice that he was leaving his parents behind... ​​''